Sunday, June 12, 2016

So this is how it ends?



“So, that’s it, then?” She leaned back against the side of her car, playing with the keys in her hand while watching him from the corner of her eye.  His face gave nothing away; he remained stoic as always. 

“Fate fell short this time,” he said with a shrug.  She sighed and looked up toward the sky, cursing Fate while wondering if it really was a thing. 

Often, she thought their “what ifs” outweighed their “hads.” She knew she lived in her head too much, and maybe that’s where much of their relationship lived as well. Still, he knew her better than anyone and their relationship had endured all these years.  But perhaps it had had one up and down too many.

With a curt nod, she got into the car and went to close the door.  He reached out and grabbed it before she could shut it all the way.  “You know, it’s not against the rules to say you were wrong.”  She rolled her eyes as she put the key in the ignition.  Stubbornness, pride – they both had too much of it for their own good.  With her hand still on the key, she turned and looked defiantly at him. He drove her nuts.  He was the only person in the world she actually fought with, and she could never figure out why it was that way with him. 

“Yes it is,” she replied.  She knew she was being unreasonable, but when she was pissed she didn’t care.

He knew he was pushing her buttons, but he kept pushing anyway.  “Fine, so just bend the rules a little, you need to admit partial blame.  It’s not like you ever follow the rules anyway.”

For some reason - maybe it was his tone, or maybe it was because she knew he wasn’t entirely wrong, but that set her off.  Angrily she jerked the key to the right, starting the ignition.  With her other hand she pushed out against the door, causing him to stagger back a couple steps.  “You’re not the boss of me,” she said as she slammed it shut.

Angrily, she shifted into drive, but she kept her foot on the brake as her mind raced.  She glanced into her side mirror and saw he was still standing there, watching her.  He looked pissed now as well.  But there was something else.  Perhaps he was thinking the same thing she was – about the amount of miles they’d been through together, and the amount of miles she was about to put between them now.  But, she didn’t ask.  Instead, she put the car in reverse and backed up until he was even with her.  Unrolling the window, she turned to look at him again; her anger replaced with pensiveness.

"You know, this place was never the same again, after you came and went.”

"This place??” he asked, looking around the parking lot of his apartment complex.

“No,” she shook her head.  “This place” she said as she put her hand over her heart.  It was the closest she could come to an apology.  With that, she put her car in gear and drove off.

So long,’ she thought wistfully to herself without looking back.
 

© Dahlia Ramone: June 12, 2016
 
 
This was written for Blogophilia Week 17.9
Topic: “Bending The Rules”

Bonus Points:

(Hard, 2 pts) Quote Steve Prefontaine (I didn’t)
(Easy, 1 pt) Incorporate a Blink-182 lyric in your blog:
 
Fate fell short this time /
This place was never the same again, after you came and went
(All lyrics from "Feeling This")

 




28 comments:

  1. Seems she was leaving, no matter what, which is find, but sometimes, silence says it all.

    This was really intense, Dahlia. I was into the dialogue, even without choosing sides.

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    1. Maybe she was looking for a sign to stay, but didn't get one. I'm not even sure which side I was on.

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  2. Intriguing... I think it would be something that would be good if they have been together for a long time, is find out what they fight about. Trivial junk, or are they trying to change the other person into their fantasy person... Intense. -Dave Raider

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    1. Maybe they fought all the time because they were too similar and it was like looking into mirrors they didn't want to see? Maybe opposites attract for a reason.

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  3. Intense! When one places a hand over their heart it is a sign of pure pain and heartache that can never be healed

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    1. Really? I hadn't thought of that before. But it kinda makes sense.

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  4. I enjoyed this a lot! It'd be nice to know more about this relationship, but I guess that is why they're called short stories. :)

    Irene

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    1. lol! I haven't written a short story in a while, wanted to make sure I could still write them ;)

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  5. They're both strongwilled not wanting to give in, even though they know their limits, still the pride is strong in both. Not a good factor in any relationship. There needs to be a give and take without expectations.

    Splendid writing. I was drawn into their little squabble half hoping one would give in yet knowing the awful outcome. Loved it, doll face. ~~Leta

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    1. You're absolutely right - relationships definitely require give and take. Maybe I'll write more on these two another time :)

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  6. That was like a trip back to the 70's. Had ever nerve tingling, so intense.

    I may not need any coffee this morning

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    1. lol! It was kinda nice to take a break from poetry. I'd like to get back into short stories and dialogue. We'll see where next week's prompts take me :)

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  7. The last word. The last dance. Shut the door and move on.

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    1. Last dance, last chance, for love. Don't know why your comment made me think of that. Now I have Donna Summer's song in my head - lol!

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  8. Sometimes an offering of a sad goodbye doesn't seem to help. 6 points, Earthling!!

    ME
    Martien Ecrits :)

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    1. Sad goodbyes are sadder when they're senseless. Thanks for the points, Marvin :)

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  9. amazing dramatic tension the way you wrote it, also so sadly and perfectly human, so real

    Samantha

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    1. I haven't written prose in a while, I forgot how much I enjoyed creating characters and emotions. Thanks for stopping by, Samantha :)

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  10. You captured the entire roller coaster of emotions perfectly!

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    1. "Roller coaster" - that's a great way to describe it. Thanks, C :)

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  11. I enjoyed this very much
    Stormy

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  12. Wow, a riveting slice of life write that's chock full of emotion! For a minute there I thought she was going to run him down, lol! Excellent writing, you should do prose more often. :D xoxo

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    1. lol! I haven't written any murderous characters before, but who knows? It's a new season :) And I would like to start writing more prose.

      Thanks, dollface. Love you <3

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