“So, that’s it,
then?” She leaned back against the side of her car, playing with the keys in
her hand while watching him from the corner of her eye. His face gave nothing away; he remained stoic
as always.
“Fate fell short
this time,” he said with a shrug. She
sighed and looked up toward the sky, cursing Fate while wondering if it really
was a thing.
Often, she thought
their “what ifs” outweighed their “hads.” She knew she lived in her head too
much, and maybe that’s where much of their relationship lived as well. Still,
he knew her better than anyone and their relationship had endured all these years. But perhaps it had had one up and down too
many.
With a curt nod,
she got into the car and went to close the door. He reached out and grabbed it before she
could shut it all the way. “You know, it’s
not against the rules to say you were wrong.”
She rolled her eyes as she put the key in the ignition. Stubbornness, pride – they both had too much
of it for their own good. With her hand
still on the key, she turned and looked defiantly at him. He drove her
nuts. He was the only person in the
world she actually fought with, and she could never figure out why it was that
way with him.
“Yes it is,” she
replied. She knew she was being unreasonable,
but when she was pissed she didn’t care.
He knew he was
pushing her buttons, but he kept pushing anyway.
“Fine, so just bend the rules a little, you need to admit partial
blame. It’s not like you ever follow the
rules anyway.”
For some reason -
maybe it was his tone, or maybe it was because she knew he wasn’t entirely
wrong, but that set her off. Angrily she
jerked the key to the right, starting the ignition. With her other hand she pushed out against
the door, causing him to stagger back a couple steps. “You’re not the boss of me,” she said as she
slammed it shut.
Angrily, she
shifted into drive, but she kept her foot on the brake as her mind raced. She glanced into her side mirror and saw he
was still standing there, watching her.
He looked pissed now as well. But
there was something else. Perhaps he was
thinking the same thing she was – about the amount of miles they’d been through
together, and the amount of miles she was about to put between them now. But, she didn’t ask. Instead, she put the car in reverse and
backed up until he was even with her.
Unrolling the window, she turned to look at him again; her anger
replaced with pensiveness.
“No,” she shook her
head. “This place” she said as she put
her hand over her heart. It was the
closest she could come to an apology.
With that, she put her car in gear and drove off.
‘So long,’ she thought wistfully to herself
without looking back.
© Dahlia Ramone: June 12, 2016
This was written for Blogophilia
Week 17.9
Topic: “Bending The Rules”
Bonus Points:
(Hard, 2 pts) Quote Steve
Prefontaine (I didn’t)
(Easy, 1 pt) Incorporate a
Blink-182 lyric in your blog:
Seems she was leaving, no matter what, which is find, but sometimes, silence says it all.
ReplyDeleteThis was really intense, Dahlia. I was into the dialogue, even without choosing sides.
Maybe she was looking for a sign to stay, but didn't get one. I'm not even sure which side I was on.
DeleteIntriguing... I think it would be something that would be good if they have been together for a long time, is find out what they fight about. Trivial junk, or are they trying to change the other person into their fantasy person... Intense. -Dave Raider
ReplyDeleteMaybe they fought all the time because they were too similar and it was like looking into mirrors they didn't want to see? Maybe opposites attract for a reason.
DeleteIntense! When one places a hand over their heart it is a sign of pure pain and heartache that can never be healed
ReplyDeleteReally? I hadn't thought of that before. But it kinda makes sense.
DeleteI enjoyed this a lot! It'd be nice to know more about this relationship, but I guess that is why they're called short stories. :)
ReplyDeleteIrene
lol! I haven't written a short story in a while, wanted to make sure I could still write them ;)
DeleteThey're both strongwilled not wanting to give in, even though they know their limits, still the pride is strong in both. Not a good factor in any relationship. There needs to be a give and take without expectations.
ReplyDeleteSplendid writing. I was drawn into their little squabble half hoping one would give in yet knowing the awful outcome. Loved it, doll face. ~~Leta
You're absolutely right - relationships definitely require give and take. Maybe I'll write more on these two another time :)
DeleteThat was like a trip back to the 70's. Had ever nerve tingling, so intense.
ReplyDeleteI may not need any coffee this morning
lol! It was kinda nice to take a break from poetry. I'd like to get back into short stories and dialogue. We'll see where next week's prompts take me :)
DeleteThe last word. The last dance. Shut the door and move on.
ReplyDeleteLast dance, last chance, for love. Don't know why your comment made me think of that. Now I have Donna Summer's song in my head - lol!
DeleteSometimes an offering of a sad goodbye doesn't seem to help. 6 points, Earthling!!
ReplyDeleteME
Martien Ecrits :)
Sad goodbyes are sadder when they're senseless. Thanks for the points, Marvin :)
Deleteamazing dramatic tension the way you wrote it, also so sadly and perfectly human, so real
ReplyDeleteSamantha
I haven't written prose in a while, I forgot how much I enjoyed creating characters and emotions. Thanks for stopping by, Samantha :)
DeleteYou captured the entire roller coaster of emotions perfectly!
ReplyDelete"Roller coaster" - that's a great way to describe it. Thanks, C :)
DeleteI enjoyed this very much
ReplyDeleteStormy
Glad you enjoyed it, Stormy. Thank you :)
DeleteWow, a riveting slice of life write that's chock full of emotion! For a minute there I thought she was going to run him down, lol! Excellent writing, you should do prose more often. :D xoxo
ReplyDeletelol! I haven't written any murderous characters before, but who knows? It's a new season :) And I would like to start writing more prose.
DeleteThanks, dollface. Love you <3
Powerful storytelling.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Barbara :)
Delete((hugs))
Great post! :)
ReplyDeleteDJ
Thanks, Diana :)
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